After the discussion I had about my scene idea, I came up with a slight variation that will fit to time. The scene starts in exactly the same way with the doctor greeting the patient as he wakes up after his procedure.
Doctor : Good news, the leg was removed successfully.
Patient : What!?, Where's my leg? What Have you done?
Doctor : You are Mr Smith aren't you?
Patient : Ah.....right........I'll be back in a moment.
As you can see, the diagogue is much less and leaves much more time to animated the thought processes of both characters, particularly the patient when he realises that his leg is missing, he would be looking back and fouth at his leg and the doctor and would probably be a bit speechless.
The area where this scene needs to improve is the ending. I will act the scene out with a couple of deifferent endings because it would end differently depending on what sort of character the doctor is. For example if the doctor was very confident, almost arrogant, then he would probably blame it on somebody else because in his eyes, he could do no wrong. I will make another entry when I have got this reference footage.
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